A Brilliant Plan – Friday Fictioneers

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Photo Prompt – Copyright -Georgia Koch

All was there. Clothes, Food, Blankets, new phones and even books in case we would get bored. This boat was our way out. We would row upstream and soon we would be in open water.

His plan was brilliant –as always.

“What do you think?” he asked and his voice made me jump.

“It’s perfect, we will be safe.”

“I think so too, let’s get the boat in the water.”

“But what if they will follow?”

No, worries, we will be walking in the opposite direction, while they will be searching for us.”

“But…?”

“There is no but, let’s go.”

(Word Count: 100)


Friday Fictioneers is my new guilty pleasure. No matter how busy I am, every Wednesday I have to check out the new pictures for our new 100-word challenge. Interesting enough, it’s not just about writing a new short story, it’s also about reading other blogger’s fictional stories.

Give it a try, but -I have to warn you- it is addictive. Click >>>here<<< and meet Rochelle Wisoff0 Fields and all the other talented writers.

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20 thoughts on “A Brilliant Plan – Friday Fictioneers

  1. I really want to know what they’re running from now! Something truly terrifying by the sounds of it. And will they make it to safety? Great little snapshot of desperation 🙂

  2. i’m confused about who is saying what and who is who. let me explain:

    His plan was brilliant –as always. (this is the speaker referring to “he”)

    “What do you think?” he asked and his voice made me jump. “It’s perfect, we will be safe.” (is the person speaking here the same person with the brilliant plan?)

    “I think so too, let’s get the boat in the water.” (is this the speaker again? is the speaker agreeing with the person with the brilliant plan?)

    “But what if they will follow?” (is this the “he” with the brilliant plan?)

    No, worries, we will be walking in the opposite direction, while they will be searching for us.” (now this seems like the speaker, but this line should be spoken by the “he” with the plan)

    “But…?” (who is this now?)

    “There is no but, let’s go.” (the confidence in this line should be from the “he” with the brilliant plan, but by alternation, this is actually the speaker. this is why i’m confused)

  3. Dear Bridget,

    It sounds like he’s covered all of his bases and has me wondering what they’re running from. I can’t say that I’m sorry FF is your new guilty pleasure. No need to feel guilty at all. 😉 I’ve been addicted since my first flash four years ago.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  4. Inspired! Isn’t it strange that being constrained in a creative project can yield more creativity that if totally free-play? I like the idea of this challenge. May take your advice!

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